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Summer vacation

来源:李俊逸 八(1)班   时间:2013-09-30   浏览次数:3432

 

Last summer, my friends and I took the train to Xiamen. The weather was very good. Because the weather there was hot and sunny. So we went to thebeach, and it was cool! We also went to swim, and it was very interesting!

Next day, we went to Gu Langyu. It was very beautiful and surprising. We took many photos. The food was very great, but I liked fruits very much. Because they were very sweet. We ate many bananas and pineapples. Then we went to buy something for my family. I thinkXiamengave me a big surprise.

All in all, the trip was very great!

 

 Analysis:The craftiest part of this passage lies in the writers accurate description of the location where they spent their holiday. Meanwhile the writer also expressed her own feelings from different perspectives, which made the passage more commendable.

点评:这篇文章最巧妙的地方就在于小作者对度假地点作出了准确的形容与描述,同时能有层次低表达自己的感受,真是棒极了! 

 

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